Final draft

Recently, Parents are gearing up their children to read. There are even robots invented to serve this purpose. They read fairy tale to children are creating, and they are popular, especially to couples working together for a living, and rate of sales of them is growing increasingly. Why the robots are popular and have abilities to read to children? Is the reading education so important? Most people may already think that reading education is important, and it exert a strong influence, but they don't interest in this greatly and Korea does not proceed this education systematically but it just conventional to development of children. Therefore, I think why people educate children to read and Is reading education suitable for development of children? And I thought influences of reading educations in three aspects;  in emotion, in linguistic, in social & government.

First of all, children are inexperienced and they lack of experiences yet, so they can have the lots of experiences to grow emotional by reading. They can have creativity and be imaginative by reading books of various fields vicariously. Also, they can learn emotions such as joy and sorrow and control their emotions through the behavior and lines the main character of the book. Actually, a researcher found that many children would learn self-esteem, manners, modesty honesty. Therefore reading education that develop children's abilities in emotion is important because their direct experiences are limited.

Second, When we are young, most of us might be told stories that mother or father or grandmother read us. According to studies, their native languages which are used by reading can affect their learning of language. Actually children who were told stories by parents or grandparents are learned native language easily than the other children who did not that experience.
In addition, students who read many books are good at understanding the individual sentences and the organizational structure of a piece of writing. And also "they are more likely to do well in school or pass exams than students who are weak readers". If you want your child to do well at school, let and encourage him or her to read. Therefore reading education is important and has significant influence to development of children in linguistic. 

Finally, There are many book clubs that children or students can express their opinions and communicate with other people and then their social abilities can be enhanced. And also there are many cases that people who read many books or educated to read many books can be inventors or politicians, innovators. For example, Edison and Bill Gates read many books when they were young told wise sayings about reading. People like Bill Gates are succeeded with collaboration intellectual curiosity and reading. And other people who are like Edison are overcome situations that are in danger or despair. Because these people existed, society or government can be developed.

Of course, There are  "Can reading be educated to children?" But I think that from at that time of children, reading education must be organized systematically. If such reading education is not instilled when they are young, they might resist later in life. And also there are people not only parents and teachers but also specialist of reading of children. They will lead them to a right way with books. And there are also book master who recommend the books that are good books and fits readers' age.

In my conclusion, I think reading education is suitable for development of children. Through reading education, children can have the lots of experiences and those make children be rich in emotion and expressions. And also they can learn native language easily from parents or grandparents and also develop linguistic characteristics. In addition, they can be great people like Edison and Bill Gates. There are many mothers who are aggressive about children's education, but they are not aggressive about reading of their children.
Recently, rates of children's reading are decreasing, and they do not once or twice a month. So I think, parents should encourage for children to read.

References

reading education is important in many aspects
http://esl.fis.edu/parents/advice/read.htm
definition of reading education in U.S.A and Instructional methods and history.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Reading_education_in_the_United_States
the current reading is applied information age and suitable reading education of future is reading out of school curriculum. And reading is influence social ability of children.
http://www.korean.go.kr/nkview/nklife/2012_4/22_0403.pdf

Self evaluation

1) What score do you think you deserve? Here is the rubric:
I think i deserve 2 points

2) What did you do well?
I think i wrote structurally.

3) What could you have done better?

I supplement my narration and conclusion.

4) Which part of the classical argument did you use the best?

nothing special

5) Which part of the classical argument did you use the most poorly?

It is not persuasive overall

6) What's your strategy to make your second draft better?
I supplement my narration and conclusion.
My narration is strong. I do a good job explaining the foundations of the issue, and I prepare my audience to hear my argument.